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What's Developed: 2010
giventofly43 wrote in bpsociety
Look what it's worth in pictures these days
crisp and replaceable
not hazy in sepia
flash in an instant
saved a gigabyte over
erasing the mystery of a distant past
erasing the majesty of mystery
all our honchos, heroes, head hunters, hooligans
    with their stories spelled out and spilled
and its not gonna take a ghost writer to dictate
and its not gonna take a sleuth to magnify
and its trapped forever in invisible electronic tangles
    so cheap and bountiful
    so naked its obscene
and we can laugh at transparency
and resent starry eyes
and exterminate self indulgence
    lest our cumberbunds drop
letting all our hang ups hang out
    the first step to a literal species
   

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you're wonderful! the poem is pounding, so rhythmical-- an excellent beat poem, I think.

it feels like the beat chokes only in a couple of places, so it might be worth revisiting these lines:

"saved a gigabyte over
erasing the mystery of a distant past
erasing the majesty of mystery"

"and its [sic: it's?] trapped forever in invisible electronic tangles"

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